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PostPosted: January 4th, 2010, 4:48 pm 
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I'm back with another question regarding my memoir.

This time I'd like some advice on "me" versus "I". Currently my manuscript is filled with "me" as in Johnny and me did this, while me and Timmy did that. It's informal, to be kind (or just plain wrong), but will the me's cause the manuscript to be rejected immediately?

I used "me" to help set the writing to be from a 13 year old writing at the time rather than a 45 year old reflecting on the time. That was the intent, at least.

Paul


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A 6 year old maybe, but surely a 13 year old knows the difference between I and me, unless s/he is poorly educated? I would advise against submitting something with, um, unusual grammar. There are better ways to allow the voice of a teenager to come out in your ms than to resort to fiddling with the grammar.

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I agree with Daoine.
Show us it's a young lad by how he talks (in direct speech), what he does, how he reacts to situations, how he views the other characters etc. But don't use the informal language in the narration. Because it's a memoir, the reader therefore knows it's written by an adult looking back. Adult narration with inserts of juvenile speech would give a better balance to the book.
It's very difficult to keep up the slang/informal speech throughout a piece, without lapsing into 'adult' text. Only the really good/experienced writers can get away with it. EG Mark Twain.
For your first foray into the publishing world you need to really impress the editor/publisher with your writing skills.


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Many many thanks for the input folks. I will add this to my list of fixes.

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